Chow Fun with Dunces
posted by January 8 at 9:09 AMon
God knows I love a spirited back-n-forth with a Stranger reader, and while I don’t think today’s story will scale the operatic heights of the Freykis fracas, it’s still worth sharing.
It begins with a letter sent to Last Days from a male reader who had some quibbles with this week’s Chow lead by Chris McCann. The man signed his e-mail grievance with what looks like his real name, but for the sake of fair play, I’ll give him a pseudonym.
“Albert Einstein” writes:
Chris McCann’s first paragraph reads:
“Seattle is a city in crisis. The war rages in its neighborhoods and in the hearts and minds of its citizens. Do we want to embrace the idea of Seattle as a dense urban center or work to maintain the vision of our city as a collection of sprawling neighborhoods? Each side struggles daily to convince us that its urban vision is correct, honorable, sensible, while maligning proponents of the other Seattle as either retrograde or rash. “
If you could, try to explain to Chris that writing a lead-in paragraph that actually describes the restaurant he’s attempting to review will help retain readers, while at the same time make him sound intelligent.
uh, yeah, but he’s reviewing two restaurants, and his existing lead-in paragraph sets up his discussion of both quite well.
thanks for writing.
2 restaurents or 3, 3 dead troops or 300 it really doesn’t matter. It’s a very sloopy leadin paragraph.
Einstein’s next email:
He’s actually reviewing only 1 restaurant and not two as you claim. How you got the idea that he’s reviewing 2 pizza places is beyond me, because it simply is not in print.
he reviews both all-purpose pizza and tom douglas’ serious pie.
are you sure you know how to read?
Still waiting on a reply. I’ll keep you posted. (And here’s hoping “a very sloopy leadin paragraph” becomes standard copy-editor parlance.)